Essay 30 – A sense of competition in children should be encouraged

GT Writing Task 2 (Essay Writing) Sample # 30

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

Model Answer:

In the beginning of human history, when our early human ancestors used to live in the cave, the idea of carrying a “sense of competition” was perfectly alright because we had to fight with the animals and many other adverse situations to survive. But, we don’t live in the “cave” age anymore, and as such, encouraging children to compete against each other is not needed, according to many. In this essay, I will discuss both views but personally, I am in favour of teaching cooperation rather than competition to children.

To begin with, by our very nature, we want to blend within a crowd, we want to identify ourselves with a certain group, be it a religious group, a musical band, a football team or a political party. In order to grow and evolve, we need to feel connected to other people, we need to learn from them, and we learn from our peers, instead of actually remaining busy competing against each other. So, in a sense, it is fair to assume that we are born to “co-operators” and we should teach our children to help others, not to fight to accumulate as much as they can.

On the other hands, we are also “competitors” by the very same nature as we have a certain tendency to stick out of the crowd, be somebody, be acknowledged for what we are able to achieve. Of course, this kind of “competition” is alright for young children to a certain extent as it helps them become a better doctor, a better teacher or a better lawyer in the future. But, encouraging them to be any more “competitive”, than what they already naturally are, is certainly not a good thing because this would ultimately weaken, if not destroy, their “spirit of humanity” which has helped us survive so far by co-operating among each other for thousands of years.

To draw the conclusion, co-operation is what we actually need to teach our children if we genuinely want to live in a better world, instead of encouraging our children to compete against each other.

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